Posted Tue Jan 15, 2013 5:17AM
Hi to all. I'm making this topic in hopes to understand that hiding a vague concept "composition of this file lacking visual impact"?
How I need to do this picture, to keep it simple in execution, but was no rejected for this reason?
I want to hear advice like on this picture, and as a whole for this reason for refusal.
I would appreciate your specific advice.
This is my picture: https://dl.dropbox.com/u/68178933/bingo%20win.jpg
(Edited on 2013-01-15 05:20:27 by kelvinjay)
(Edited on 2013-01-15 05:21:02 by kelvinjay)
Posted Sat Jan 19, 2013 8:03AM
Nobody can`t say anything?
Posted Mon Jan 21, 2013 6:30AM
I understand your approach to this drawing was to be simplistic by using some simple shapes and flat colors but sometimes less is more. While the concept is there, I can understand why it received a rejection for lacking visual impact. You might be better off to focus on capturing the joy of the moment and getting rid of a lot of unecessary simple elements. Consider removing the light blue ovals in the background, the yellow starburst and shadow behind the bingo card. These elements clutter your drawing and are unecessary shapes that detract from your subject. The red bingo card drops are too simple. Upon initially looking at your illustration, I didn't make the 'connection' between the bingo dabber and the drops of ink on the ground. Consider removing the majority of the drops on the ground and make the drop shapes more interesting with curves so as to appear more as splatters of ink. You may want to consider switching the bingo dabber and bingo card, so that the card is in the hand that is lower and the bingo dabber is in the higher hand. This might give you the opportunity to make a really nice splash with ink to really get the idea that your character is in motion. Simplify the Bingo card. Maybe the bingo card could be colored a light gray instead of red - maybe it could just say the words Bingo. Also try revisiting the expression on the characters face. I see you were going for a happy expression but your subject's features are a bit distorted. Try turning the corners of his mouth up more to really give a nice big smile and maybe try widening his eyes, removing the nostrils etc. You could also take the opportunity to show that the character is in the middle of jumping by making the subject's hair stand up - I would also suggest you revisit this with the subject's clothing to convey more motion as well.
Again, the concept is there, but really try to focus on the joyful expression of your character.
I hope I've made some valuable suggestions here to improve your file.
Posted Tue Jan 22, 2013 6:48AM
Thank You Jannifer for your explanations.
I will try to redo the work considering your advice.
(Edited on 2013-01-22 06:48:56 by DimaChe)